Elevator Pitch No. 3
https://youtu.be/OcubDwgbN8s
Reflection: I did not submit a second elevator pitch. Therefore, I do not have any feedback from it. From my first one, someone mentioned enjoyed two aspects of my hook. This time I eliminated the part about the stats of college stress and made the hook more dynamic by focusing more on the consumer of Zenergy's cycle classes. Unlike the first pitch, I also mentioned Gainesville in this video as the Geographic Location, the pricing of the cycle classes, and what to expect from our service. I wish I hard more time to elaborate on our diverse classes (i.e. more high energy / more meditative /etc). In all, I believe this to be an effective elevator pitch and would appreciate any feedback.
Hey Christina,
ReplyDeleteYou delivered a great elevator pitch. You maintained great eye contact and had a clear, coherent delivery. I found your gestures to be very engaging. That being said, your pitch could have been more dynamic if you stood and more of your body was visible. Furthermore, I enjoyed how you leveraged your experience at Rec Sports to establish your capital. If you want to be successful and distinguish from your competitors, you cannot simply leverage your idea, but you must also leverage yourself.
I really liked this pitch! The hook was a lot stronger and felt more intriguing. Also adding in the specifics such as price and location allows myself and others to have more of a perspective exactly what you plan to offer and who is receiving the benefits. Since Zenergy is an active hobby people would partake in, move around more during the pitch.
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ReplyDeleteGreat pitch! Your pitch greatly improved from the first one. Your hook was very captivating and made me want to keep watching to learn more about your product. The fact that you added the price was very beneficial and allowed me to learn more about the logistics of your product. I am looking forward to see what you come up with!
I thought this was a great pitch that was built off an early, yet effective use of the repetition of the word "you". You personalized this message like it was an orientation message when a boss wants to get his workers excited to take on the task at hand. By then transitioning to giving a personal anecdote it really reinforced the individuality aspect you brought to the pitch which was really effective. People love to be individually cared about and catered to and you achieved both aims in this pitch great job.
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